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Nikhita

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PostSubject: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 5:41 pm

SACRIFICE
i have waited in the shadows too long to be
for my true love to be one with me
and as the moon lit starry night shines
i feel the troubles in my mind
for i have bared and carried my sorrows far too long
and now i wish to god for them to be gone
just then in the corner of my heart
i feel someone whom i shouldn't have cut apart
for this life was meant to be his
but i was to selfish to part with the bliss
and now i have come to realize
that he wasn't the devil in disguise
it was me all the while
lying and stealing precious moments of his life
for to be with me was all he wanted
but i was too scared and haunted
to this day i apologise
but these very shadows ask me to
SACRIFICE!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 8:29 pm

very impressive lady...so is this true?? or just an inspirational feeling...
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 8:57 pm

its so darn true n apt...bahut acche!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 9:22 pm

yeah very true! gr8 one nikhita!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 9:38 pm

it's sort of my life ady...sheeshh it feels soo nice to get these compliments...thanks guys...am not that bad this means!! * blush blush*
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:01 pm

wowie..u shud start writing FROM today..its an order!! lol
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:20 pm

hey ......dats gr8 ...........neva knew dat ur into rhymin n stuff......
kkep on the good work gal cheers
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 10:20 pm

oh wow...i really should??? am only gonna do that after alisha tells me the same..she is the inspiration behind me starting to write!!

vaise avin...order??? yeh kal ka badla utaar rahe ho aap?
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 11:01 pm

hmmm yes!!! for ur own good Razz
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Fri Aug 03, 2007 11:34 pm

oye nikhita....coool ya....m impressed.....keep it up...Smile
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Sat Aug 04, 2007 12:29 am

kyaa baat hai luk sum1's gt hidden talentz...studnet u cleared d entrance...lol welcum 2 poets league!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Sat Aug 04, 2007 1:10 am

thankoo anisha...u dunno wat it means to me...thank you soo much for taking me in...i am more than honoured to be with u intellectual souls...*winkwink* i cudn;t have asked for more in this life!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Sat Aug 04, 2007 11:02 pm

hmm....niki at work...belive me u r gud at it...
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Sun Aug 05, 2007 1:15 am

waah waah!! good stuff haan...keep up the gud work..u write really well..trust me
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Sun Aug 05, 2007 1:24 am

thankooo ssooo much guys!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 21, 2007 2:17 am

wow!!!!! and i was asking u to try writing something!!!!!!!!! man u rock!!! it is deep and extremely well written....... awesome work.... and if this is ur story...

let your shadows be gone,
for ur life deserves to filled with light.....
a light which brings color of love and happiness.....
let the picture in ur profile be a mirror of ur heart..
for now and forever!!!!!!!!!cheers
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 21, 2007 2:18 am

Quote :
let your shadows be gone,
for ur life deserves to filled with light.....
a light which brings color of love and happiness.....
let the picture in ur profile be a mirror of ur heart..
for now and forever!!!!!!!!!cheers

i'd only say this:

"log samajhte hain hume aadat hai muskuraane ki,
par woh yeh nahin jaante ki yeh to ada hai gham chhupane ki"
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 21, 2007 2:23 am

gham ko yoon naa chupaaiye..... hum aap ke saath baatein karenge..... apna gham hume bataaiye!! dil mein pyaar rahe toh hi accha.....apne dil mein dard bhar kar heart attack ko yoon naa bulaaiye!!!!!!! i'm sorry for the spellings!!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 21, 2007 2:24 am

hahahahh!! u toh turned my senti lines to comedy yaar!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 21, 2007 2:26 am

aare being senti is next to being mental..... since u took the senti waala position...... i thought why not be mental........
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Thu Aug 23, 2007 11:43 pm

i liked ur stint with ur pen
sacrifice something deep down we dread
ur first poem with such pure thoughts
dont let ur talent rot...

hehehe..

so. ms.serious freak.... one more serious post.. Very Happy
nice stuff. Wink
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 28, 2007 6:36 pm

one thing which i really like about this poem is it conveys a hidden idea... in which i solely believe... i dunno how u did it SERIOUS gal.. but u stole away ma thought.. hehe... Both devil n god live inside us ... n wen one takes over another then the demonic or god like qualities are seen... bingo.. way to go gurl!! So wat should i sacrifice ehh?? hehe
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Tue Aug 28, 2007 10:04 pm

trust me...i did not understand a word u said above....and stop calling me SERIOUS!!
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Wed Aug 29, 2007 7:04 pm

lolzzzzzz....
well i saw that point in ur poem somehow...
read it again ur poem n ma post.. u shall understand it...
if u dont then i shall put ma thots in some odr words.. hehehe
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PostSubject: Re: My first stint with poetry...SACRIFICE!   Wed Aug 29, 2007 7:19 pm

Hey awesome work...really well written...cheers...Keep it upSmile
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